Today is the day before the hand-in, we had a class crit today where we got to showcase our work and gather feedback. My piece’s feedback was positive, and I got some good constructive feedback on changes I could make to my piece. One was to change the voice of the text to speech midway through the piece to keep the listener engaged which was a good idea. They also said that a British voice could be a good idea, as on tube lines they use a mixture of voices and because the text to speech during the first half is an authoritative figure it could be interesting to switch that stance during the second half.
I was also told that the ending could be more interesting if I put my perspective on it, and how ironic it is that as sound artists we are trained to listen carefully to the sounds around us, even though that sound is causing damage to our ears. I was also told that we should add a reference in our piece, so I thought using the reference from the world health organisation about the health effects would be suitable. I decided to use a different male voice representing me and talking from my point of view, meanwhile, the rest of the paper is spoken more like a doctor. I thought this would be an interesting way to point out that we are all somewhat guilty of noise pollution, and that it is somewhat ironic and hypocritical of me to be talking about it. But this whole paper got me to learn how bad noise pollution is.
I tried to add a screenshot of what my Ableton session looked like with all the finished edits but I had some issues with the screenshot deleting my post when added. So here is a link to it
I am very happy with the feedback and think it improved my work, it was very exciting to see everyone else’s hard work and it was very inspiring. This has been a very interesting course to work on and gave me some much-needed context on what an audio paper actually is. This is something I would love to come back to later on in my career, as I think it is a good way to tell a story in a format that is quite unusual.